lunes, 18 de noviembre de 2013

A NARRATIVE

The Birthday 

Sally is my best friend. I've known her since 9 years. She is very nice and sensible. Last Saturday, it was her birthday. I thought that my friends and I could prepare a surprise party. We could rent a local, decorate it, put good music and make a cake. It would be amazing! So, I took Sally's mobile and I secretly sent a text messages for all her friends. 

The great day came. Sally and I would meet in a park (near the local) like a normal Saturday. While I was entertaining Sally, my other friends finished the decorations and the guests arrived at the local. At 7 o'clock, Sally and I went to the party. Unfortunately, while we were entering in it, I had a terrified scene: Sally's ex-boyfriend was there! I felt embarrassed because Sally hated him and I invited him by mistake. She still had his number in the mobile. The boy thought that Sally had forgiven him. I told him the error and he left the place. Luckily, Sally wasn't very angry with me and she enjoyed the rest of the party. 

Next day, I explained the failure to Sally. She laughed a lot and she told me that at first she thought it was an awful joke. Then she saw that it wasn't. She was very grateful and happy about the party and the little gift which we bought her. In the end everything was good but I'll never prepare a surprise party again!


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  1. The narrative has a clear beginning, middle and end: 3
    Each paragraph expresses a main idea: 3
    Use of different past tenses: 1
    Use of time expressions to sequence events: 3
    Use of a variety of language: 2
    No grammar, spelling or punctuation mistakes: 2
    Mark: 7,7

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